One of my beginning 4x5 shots. Would love your critique, suggestions and comments..
One of my beginning 4x5 shots. Would love your critique, suggestions and comments..
The upper part is not really interesting, but lower clearly shows meaning: life is a bunch of ways, with a fair choice of change. But nevertheless, we all end in the same place.
Over-all a very good beginning 4x5 image.
Actually, I like it much better with the bottom half cropped off. Or even cropping out the bottom to make a square image.
1) There is a strange feeling of curvature in the lower right which causes my eye to drop down and off the image in that direction -- in turn this causes a disconnect between the top and the bottom of the image -- not harmonious. It looks more to be two images -- one of the tracks and one of the city.
2) By cropping a little less than half off the bottom (to that curved post next to the tracks on the left), the tracks still are a strong element, but balanced by the roadway in the lower left and the road bridge on the left. One could also take a little sky out.
3) Cropping off the bottom to create a square image, also makes a fine image -- but only due to my love of square images!
But these are only my biases showing. If you do not think that these suggestions make for a stronger image, that is completely understandable.
Vaughn
One of your first shots? Good heavens....well done indeed! I quite like the view that you've selected.
I've been reorganizing my negatives recently, which has entailed looking at some of my very earliest attempts--certainly more painful for me than it will be for you, I'm sure!
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